As vulnerable as I felt including my video for Dr. Pryor's feedback, this feedback was incredibly helpful. Prior to this review, I was a bit overconfident that I had communicated my thoughts on my pitch well. Dr Pryor identified that, although my hook was catching, I spoke about my problem for the first minute of the video and didn't offer much by way of an explanation for my specific solution. I was a bit surprised by this, only because I thought that the ninety seconds should focus on bigger picture ideas, rather than details of say pricing. The further I reflected on my video, however, I realized I was missing many practical details such as the distribution of my product, the ordering process, and how my product compares with competitors. I have made my problem description more concise, while I believe still addressing the specific nature of the problem for my target market, and elaborated on many further details of my product's distinction in a saturated hospitality industry.
Once I included these details, I found myself having to pare down again in content to stay under 90 seconds for the video total. My first elevator pitch, I struggled to have enough content to say about my product. The more I refine it, the more difficult it is to be detailed and yet stay within the over all time limit.
Hey Avery,
ReplyDeleteThe way that you presented your information and the pace that you spoke made it clear to follow and understand. I think you made a huge improvement with the way you focused on the main idea of the problem that you are solving while still being able to go into specific details about the product. I also like how you tailored your approach towards the solution of the problem. By making your explanation more concise, it was easier for the audience to follow the information and allow them to identify if they were in need of the product. Great job!
I like how you opened up about your vulnerability based on Dr. Pryor’s feedback, but that wasn’t seen anywhere in your presentation. I liked how you included a very well known entrepreneur who has experienced decision fatigue. Maybe next time include body movements and hand gestures to make it seem like we’re there with you and interacting. You explained everything about your business/product but maybe also include some of the meals that your customer could order.
ReplyDeleteHey Avery! Once again, great job with your elevator pitch! Also, props to you for being willing and brave enough to turn your speech into Dr. Pryor for feedback. I am sure that his feedback was really helpful and took your speech to the next level. It is great that you include Dr. Pryor’s feedback in your reflection because now I am working on applying it to my own pitch.
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