2. The feedback on my last video was incredibly positive. One peer mentioned that I should introduce myself at the beginning, however I did not include that as Dr. Pryor had indicated in lecture that it was unnecessary and shouldn't take the space of finite conversation time about the business pitch. Another peer indicated that a hook at the beginning would have been powerful, but I did not alter the beginning of my pitch as other comments seemed to feel that my association with Steve Jobs (with respect to decision fatigue) would be attention grabbing in and of itself. I feel that this gives enough detail to be interesting without being a cheesy "Have you ever wondered what to eat for lunch?" type hook.
3. Although no one addressed this specifically, in reviewing my own work I wanted to slow down my pace and focus on my inflection. I personally feel that a huge faux-pax in presenting is lecturing in a way that avoids natural conversational cues ie. if you are posing a question, one should both raise an octave and pause for reflection. Additionally, I changed the ending question to make it more general than specifically a 30 minute meeting, but I received good feedback on this line overall so I kept it in essence.
Hi Avery!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your second attempt at the elevator pitch! I definitely noticed the slowing of your pace and the pause that you inserted prior to posing your question. All of this made the content more digestible and easier to comprehend. My only recommendation would be to perhaps use more hand gestures to engage the audience during your presentation. Overall, really great job!